Writing Lessons

A frequent reader of mine recently suggested that perhaps not everyone enjoys my “serious talk.” What’s more, this reader suggested that as a remedy, I troll Craig’s List for material. Even though some of my early blogging involved this method — and I think not well — I decided to give it another go.

I guess I can start off my saying hello.I like to have a good time and I love to learn. I am a happy person most the time and I hate to be alone. I have a beautiful son that was recently born…

I find that people tend to trust my instincts as a writer. I’m not quite sure why, but in any case, this is a perfect illustration of why it’s best to avoid the the passive voice. Not only does the passive voice needlessly prolong sentences, but it also obscures the relevant actors. That is, the beautiful son did not emerge from the ether as the phrase “recently born” might suggest. Rather, the beautiful son most likely came out of this woman’s body. But her phrasing leaves me unsure — did she rob the baby from an orphanage? Was the baby delivered on her doorstep? Was the father God? Who knows?

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2 Responses to “Writing Lessons”

  1. Olivia Says:

    loves it.

  2. mike Says:

    oh, i should’ve guessed


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